TOEFL writing

摘要

本文主要讲述托福写作的要点和注意事项。简单一句话就是：express your opinion, give reasons to explain why and use specific examples to support  your point. 

1. Topic

Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

2. step1 (taking 5 minutes (5/30))

Generally speaking, I believe that it is better for all concerned if young adults continue to live with their families for a longer time, particularly if they are going to be studying at university or something similar.

First of all, it is important to consider finances.

In addition to the importance of finances, I think this is better for a young adult's study potential.

Finally, staying at home with one's parents doesn't necessarily mean that a young adult cannot develop independence.

By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that in most cases it is actually more beneficial for most adults to continue living with their families for a longer period of time.

3. step2 (taking 5 minutes (10/30))

First of all, it is important to consider finances. These days it costs a lot to rent a house, attend university, buy a car or purchase things like insurance. By way of example, I can recall trying to live independently outside the family home as a university student and I constantly struggled to pay bills and meet all the other costs of living as a young adult. This in turn had adverse effects for things like my study performance.

3. step3 (taking 5 minutes (15/30))

In addition to the importance of finances, I think this is better for a young adult's study potential. With your family support, it is a lot easier to focus on your studies. Of course, for some people in some situations, the family situation may actually be quite distracting or stressful. However, I think it would be fair to say that you are more likely to eat better meals, have a quiet place to do school work and get a decent night;s sleep if you happen to be living in the family home. I can recall a friend from my university days who lived in share house with other students. Life was a party for him but he did not eat ot study well and inevitably his grades suffered. He had to repeat several subjects and finshed his degree later than many of his peers.

4. step4 (taking 5 minutes (20/30))

Finally, staying at home with one's parents doesn't necessarily mean that a young adult cannot develop independence. I will be the first to admit that there are parents out there who struggle to acknowledge that their children have grown up and deserve treatment as adults; it is instinctive in many of them to continue to play a "mother" role that can actually be quite stifling for a young adult. Despite this possibility, even though I spent most of my university days living with my parents, they respected me as an adult as well as their child and they did not attempt to interfere too much or limit my independence. I think this is the case for many other young people as well, so I do not think it is the case to claim that, just because someone is living with their family, they are somehow unable to enjoy benefits of independence. In fact, I believe the safe environment of the family is a good place to handle the transition to adulthood for all concerned, both the child and the parents.

5. step5 (taking 10 minutes) 

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